When Will You
When Will You
TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK :-p :-)
When will you realize
That I love you so much
Yet it’s you I despise.
When will you notice
That I am here for you
That I can be your voice.
When will you tell me
The things that you hide
Won’t you just let me see?
When will you be here
For me to hold in my arms
As we gaze into the mirror.
TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK :-p :-)
posted by katie at 12:11 AM
2 Comments:
I think that it's a good poem, but as always, it needs a bit of work.
Don't feel bad, mine need work too. I'm not picking on you, well, not now at least.
It may be better if you separated it by stanza, instead of just double spacing between every line. That is, if there are stanzas.
Peach out,
♠Joshua Laughlin♠
btw: I never once said you were "half retarded"!!!!!!!!!
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