idk.... i need to come up wit titles for my poems
You’re the only place to turn
But I am afraid to reveal it all
I don’t want you to know
About my every trip and fall
I didn’t want this life back
All I wanted was to cry
And forget everything I lack
Even if I am this far away
I need to turn to him
And follow all the way
Don’t let this day be my last
Let me to return to my life
And let me forget my past.
1-11-07
wrote this wen i wasn't in a good state of mind.....
tell me wut ya think
posted by katie at 4:57 PM
1 Comments:
too lazy to comment on all of them. I liked the top two, but that one in yellow, um 1/3/07, I'm not that sure. Typo in line two btw: the "to" should be "too".
Anyhow, I don't know what to say, the first two are good, I can follow them, and I can understand them, the last one seemed to me like you were too worried about rhyming to make any sort of sense, rhyming isn't everything, and I promise if you don't rhyme the world won't end.
later,
♠Joshua Laughlin&spades
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